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mellowcandle
mellowcandle
I don't care if you really care as long as you don't go
The snippets of fics I will never, ever write, no matter how much you cry, you pray, and you beg:



peacewish's prompt "Yukito saves the day!"


The world would never know what happened that day, how close it had come to ending. Everything would continue as it always had.

But for Sakura, nothing would ever be the same.

She knelt on the ground, clutching the hand of her dear friend and guardian, tears streaming from her eyes as she tried desperately to help him. Nothing worked.

He saved them all, yet nothing could save him.

His body was starting to fade now, dispersing into magic energy, returning to the atmosphere.

His last words told her to smile.

Then all that remained was a broken pair of glasses.






cal_reflector's prompt "The Graduate. (Touya, Sonomi, Tomoyo)"


Tomoyo's relentless cheerfulness could chafe like wool underwear on a hot day. He took it as any masochist would.

He didn't want to be happy. He didn't deserve to be happy. He didn't believe in happiness anymore. Being around her was his punishment, reminding him that he was dead inside, and he couldn't stay away.

When he arrived for dinner, Sonomi greeted him, although "greet" implied that he was welcome. "She's sick" were her actual words.

To Sonomi, he'd never be anything other than That Man's son. She would never like him or approve of him.

They were too much alike. Cynical. Arrogant. Stubborn.

"Dinner's already made and will just go to waste," she continued, "so you may as well come in." Not waiting for an answer, she turned to walk away.

With a shrug, he followed her inside. Dinner for two was sure to be less about eating and more about arguing while plates cooled and wine glasses needed refilling.

He wouldn't admit it, but verbally sparring with her was the only thing that made him feel anything. If Tomoyo was his punishment, Sonomi was his reward.

No, he'd never admit it.

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Comments
cal_reflector From: cal_reflector Date: March 22nd, 2010 09:26 pm (UTC) (Link)
Nice! It reads like the conclusion to one epic and the beginning to another. Very nice.
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: March 22nd, 2010 09:57 pm (UTC) (Link)
And I got to kill Yukito again. That's always a good time.
cal_reflector From: cal_reflector Date: March 22nd, 2010 10:04 pm (UTC) (Link)
In the Graduate, it sounds from your excerpt like Touya is in a relationship with Tomoyo, who is oblivious to how unhappy he is. Why is he so unhappy? If he's so unhappy how did he end up dating her?
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: March 22nd, 2010 10:15 pm (UTC) (Link)
Who knows? It's a snippet of a fic I'll never, ever write.
cal_reflector From: cal_reflector Date: March 22nd, 2010 10:20 pm (UTC) (Link)
But you'd pick up this fic if it were competently written by someone else?

Particularly in the context of Abyss, there seem to be a lot of ships you seem to like but shy away from. What holds you back?
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: March 23rd, 2010 01:59 pm (UTC) (Link)
Would I read it? I don't know. I probably wouldn't believe it.

I don't know that's there's anything I shy away from. There's just some characters I'm more comfortable writing. It takes practice. So I stick to just a couple at first while I try to get the hang of it. That's why so much of what I wrote last year was Nat's POV, because I started to get into a rhythm with her. Next I'll try to get in someone else's head and see how that goes.

And there are some pairings I just won't buy on the face of it. Unless someone requests it, I generally won't write a pairing that I simply don't buy.


Edited at 2010-03-23 02:01 pm (UTC)
peacewish From: peacewish Date: March 23rd, 2010 01:34 am (UTC) (Link)
Well of course you killed him. I mean, really, shoulda seen that coming. (whacks self in head).
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: March 23rd, 2010 01:55 pm (UTC) (Link)
Of course! But he still got to be the hero.
8 pathetic excuses or justify your existence