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mellowcandle
mellowcandle
so bad it's....
Oh man, if the first preview chapter of Sweet Valley Confidential is for real, then... wow. This thing is going to be my Twilight. It's going to be so, so terrible, and I'm going to love it.

But whenever I read something so badly written, I go, "Oh shit, is my writing this bad?" Because I know I have a habit of long awkward sentences, and I know I need to work on it. But these are like....

By now she was halfway through the narrow, sparsely furnished living room, heading into the safety of the very small jerry-built kitchen, with its squeezed-in mini refrigerator, two-burner stove, tiny oven, and an outsized, badly chipped, probably pre-war like the rest of the building, porcelain sink deep enough to wash babies as well as dishes.

See? Like that.


Coffee turned into a three-week miniaffair spread out over two months. Definitely rebound stuff. [Elizabeth] cried after every orgasm. How embarrassing, but he pretended not to notice.

OH MY GOD. First of all, Elizabeth Wakefield is too uptight to even ever have an orgasm. But if she did, she'd totally cry.


It was still early enough to call her best friend, the only friend she still had from Sweet Valley, Bruce Patman.

WHAT THE F'ING F? Elizabeth's only friend in the world is BRUCE???




Oh, man, I don't know if I'll be able to wait for next March.


And Nicholas Morrow better be in this, dammit.

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serena_b From: serena_b Date: July 19th, 2010 11:54 pm (UTC) (Link)
Lol, I always crack up at your Sweet Valley posts.

Your writing is not bad, trust me. And besides, even if it were, it doesn't matter unless you're trying to be some kind of pretentious literary genius or something. I read books because I enjoy the story, no matter how well written it is. I freely admit that most of the books I read are not great works of fiction, but they do their job, which is to entertain. And that's all you should worry about with your writing too. And don't write for other people, write what makes you happy.
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: July 20th, 2010 01:59 pm (UTC) (Link)
Yeah, I don't need technically flawless writing if the story and characters are compelling, but my concern with my writing is whether my sentences get too convoluted that it's difficult to read and understand. I love commas way too much, and I like to have a cadence to my sentences, but if it's not coming across in writing the way I hear it in my head, then it's something I need to work on.

This ten-years-later SVH sequel that's coming out next spring is going to be... wow, cheesetastically bad, I hope I hope.
serena_b From: serena_b Date: July 20th, 2010 05:42 pm (UTC) (Link)
Cheesetastically, I love it, lol.

Yeah, I know what you mean about the commas, I love them way too much myself. Commas and semicolon's. I don't know what my obsession with semicolon's is, but it's got to stop, lol. Usually when I haven't read one of my stories in a while and I go back and reread it I find a lot of unnecessary commas and semicolons... Ah well.
3 pathetic excuses or justify your existence