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mellowcandle
mellowcandle
shouldn't talk about it
I've been staring at these same two paragraphs of HF for days.

I started reading a book last week and got to page 33 before giving up. I thought, "This must be what it's like to read my writing." There was hardly any narrative description, things just kind of jumped around, the dialogue was probably supposed to be quippy but just came across like a bunch of non sequiturs because there was no context for anything. I couldn't connect to a single thing happening.

So I guess that's why I'm trying so hard with these paragraphs, even if the description is generic, at least it's there.

But I need to get on with the next section, and I'm just not feeling it. If I can't summon interest in what's happening, how am I to expect anyone else to?



And since that one Gou/Nagisa thing I started had to be trashed because canon screwed me over, as it does, I've started something else for them to basically fix that "Gou can't swim" bullshit, because seriously? First of all, I'm supposed to believe that after everything with Rei, it never came up before? And you cannot tell me that Papa Matsuoka didn't have both of those babies in the water from the moment they could hold their own heads up. I get that she's not athletic--neither am I; I am the opposite of athletic, I was put in the second lowest swimming group in gym class because I refused to dive (I have a weird phobia about cracking my skull/breaking my neck, which is the same reason I sucked at gymnastics), but I still love to swim. I'm giving her a reason for having lied about it, which might work. Or might not. I just want them in the pool together!

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sakuracorr From: sakuracorr Date: October 28th, 2014 09:43 pm (UTC) (Link)
Your writing always looks worse to you than most other people, but yeah I've done that with other writing and mine before.

Stupid canon! It should mind its own business!
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: October 28th, 2014 10:11 pm (UTC) (Link)
It must be because we spend more time with it than anyone else ever will. We fret over every sentence, and it will be read in just a few seconds.

Canon sucks! Why does it never give me what I want? (Oh, that's right, it gives me what I "need".)
sakuracorr From: sakuracorr Date: October 29th, 2014 09:06 pm (UTC) (Link)
We also have no objectivity. There are two ways for most authors to read their own writing, with all of the unwritten subtext or none of it, but the inbetween where most readers are? Inaccessible.

Canon sure doesn't give me what I need, it gives me what some network executive schmuck or writer thinks I want, which is usually off the mark.
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: October 30th, 2014 04:35 pm (UTC) (Link)
There's that, too.

Yeah, and too many cooks sometimes. Sure doesn't help.
cal_reflector From: cal_reflector Date: October 29th, 2014 03:29 am (UTC) (Link)
If I can't summon interest in what's happening, how am I to expect anyone else to?

What about the first paragraphs of this chapter makes readers WANT to know "What happens next?" What's the question that readers want to find out the answer to? A palace maid discovered dead outside palace grounds. Astrological phenomena bodes disaster. Mysterious graffiti on the city's walls. Objects missing from the Prince and Princess' rooms...

I know you can do it.
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: October 29th, 2014 03:26 pm (UTC) (Link)
Well, this chapter is going to be a hugeass disappointment, then, because nothing that exciting happens. The first third has been done for ages, it's the second third with my OC that's tripping me up.
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