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hope comes in circles, pain fades away
Okay, my goal this week is to finish one of the things I've started. There's either Avoidance, which is Guy POV, or Building or Music Box, which are Natalia POVs (and need much better titles). But I've been looking at a set of drabble themes which includes "nightmare" which might make a good Natalia POV, too. So if I bail on these, I might do a drabble set instead. Yeah.

The bit of Avoidance I've sketched out and need to build around goes:


"I'm afraid I don't understand you, Guy," Natalia said, her eyes flashing with annoyance. "You write me these wonderful letters saying that you're looking forward to seeing me, then you barely say a word to me. You give me the most perfunctory of greetings, then spend thirty minutes asking Anise about her studies. Meanwhile, the colonel tells me you've been staring at me all night."

"Oh, hell." Jade would notice.

"What's going on?"

There was no point hiding it anymore. "Fine, yes, I've been staring at you. Why wouldn't I? You're the most beautiful woman in the room, with hair like sunshine and a smile like salvation. Of course I was staring at you."

Some of the anger went out of her posture. "I still don't understand." She stepped closer, but he backed away, pressing himself up against the library wall. The annoyance was back. "Not this again," she sighed. "Are you still afraid of touching me?"

Yes, but for an entirely different reason. "No," was what he answered.

"Then what?"

"I want to."

"Want to what?"

Was she truly annoyed, or just very good at acting? It almost looked like she was fighting a smile as she lifted her proud chin, but he wouldn't let himself hope for that. It was too soon. She hadn't had enough time, and what kind of friend would he be if he suddenly dropped all of his emotional longings on her? He would wait. He should wait.

He couldn't wait. "I want to touch you."

She moved closer again, and this time, there was nowhere for him to go. "So touch me," she said. "I give you permission. I'll order you if I have to."


Too obvious?

Speaking of four letter words "like hope and pain and Mary", how old was Mary? Googling gets me nowhere.

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4 pathetic excuses or justify your existence
umilingual From: umilingual Date: February 9th, 2009 11:50 pm (UTC) (Link)
According to this site, she was probably about 12-13:

Luke adds that, at that time, Mary was a virgin betrothed to "a man named Joseph of the house of David" (v. 27). The Hebrew Scriptures set the normal age for betrothal at 12 1/2.

I hope that was the Mary you were asking about. My brain is tired.
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: February 10th, 2009 02:09 pm (UTC) (Link)
Heh, wrong Mary, but I appreciate the effort ^_^
cal_reflector From: cal_reflector Date: February 11th, 2009 04:55 pm (UTC) (Link)
That was good. If I may suggest a few alternative endings, after Guy says he wants to touch Natalia:

1)Natalia takes his hand and places it against her face/(insert body part here). "All you needed to do was ask."

2)Natalia embraces him. "What took you so long."

3)Something to indicate that the desire is mutual, from her words or from her behavior.
mellowcandle From: mellowcandle Date: February 11th, 2009 06:59 pm (UTC) (Link)
My plan is along the lines of #3. I'm still sketching this one out and haven't come up with the ending yet.
4 pathetic excuses or justify your existence